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Harold's New Bike
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Harold's New Bike // Work in Progress
Post by splinters // Jul 6, 2006, 7:55am
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Is it my moniter or do the stars around Harold's head seem a little dark? Great image once again
They are semi-transparent Brian, and I was considering making them even more transparent as they are, effectively, an hallucination...:rolleyes: |
Post by splinters // Jul 6, 2006, 12:37pm
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Okay....done! Here is original for comparison.
Time to move on to the next pic....:) |
Post by MadMouse // Jul 6, 2006, 10:07pm
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:banana: Yep.... its all good. :banana: |
Post by daybe // Jul 7, 2006, 1:47am
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Good job Splinters, great image you have there me likes very much.
Cheers, |
Post by splinters // Jul 7, 2006, 2:32am
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Cheers guys. Never one to rest for too long, I revisited the 'dreambike' scene. Not sure what to do here as it fits the text well and I wanted something detached from the 'Harold in the shop' type scene. I also want the bike to be the focus of the image (excuse the pun) so I added a little DOF-maybe too much, but I like the dreamy look and I added a cheque being thrown in the air in a 'what the heck!' sort of way.
Here is the text, suggestions welcome as always;
On a spinning platform was the bike of which he’d dreamed, with ‘ROCKET’ written down the side and buffed until it gleamed. It looked so nice and shiny so he said “Oh, what the heck!”, then took the wallet from his case and paid for it by cheque.
Really must start putting the pages together as promised....previous page of the story is shown for comparison...:D |
Post by TheWickedWitchOfTheWeb // Jul 7, 2006, 7:13am
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Looks good to me! I think the 'dream' image is spot on, does everything it needs to without being too far removed from the story. Nice work - more please! :) |
Post by Heidi // Jul 7, 2006, 7:20am
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These are fantastic... I can't wait to see more!
I'm also learning a lot from watching your development process. :) |
Post by splinters // Jul 7, 2006, 2:44pm
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These are fantastic... I can't wait to see more!
Then wait no longer....bit rough though...;) |
Post by Zeipher // Jul 7, 2006, 3:45pm
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ARGH! It's an alien!!!
This is cool. I've been silently watching and waiting to jump in and say "Ah ha! That's wrong!" but it hasn't come up, so I'm here to say "Great work" instead. |
Post by Heidi // Jul 8, 2006, 5:48am
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ARGH! It's an alien!!!
OH!....I think you're right. This is great! :)
Maybe rotate the shed a bit so we can have a glimpse of the hole he made crashing into it? |
Post by Zeipher // Jul 8, 2006, 6:39am
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Perhaps not rotate the horizontal angle... maybe a view from slightly below him, close to his feet looking up. This may allow you to see the hole better, and give Harold a slightly more intimidating look. |
Post by splinters // Jul 8, 2006, 7:59am
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Quick update...I may try the angle but I want this to be seen from the spectators view who might not be aware of Harold crashing his bike-just this thing emerging from the shed-I have added heads for this purpose...still very rough...:o |
Post by roman // Jul 8, 2006, 8:34am
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I love Harold and I love how this story is being developed. It is almost worthy an animation:) |
Post by Zeipher // Jul 8, 2006, 8:45am
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Almost? Definately more like it! I think the camera should stay where it is. I didn't realise he had gathered a crowd already. It makes it funnier this way. |
Post by splinters // Jul 8, 2006, 10:13am
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Sorry guys, animation is not my thing but maybe that will change with TS7.5. In the meantime console yourselves with pictures but see how your imagination 'animates' the story in your head between stills...:D |
Post by splinters // Jul 8, 2006, 1:55pm
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OK, last update for today. Going to add some grass, plant pots etc. but otherwise I cannot see much to do here...any suggestions?
All seems a bit brown to me....but then again, wood is brown...:confused: |
Post by Mike // Jul 8, 2006, 4:05pm
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Possibilities: make the fence painted pickets rather than bare wood, make the wood on the barrel a different type (or the shed itself), make the ground patchy lawn. The lighting on the last couple is perfect. It looks just like moon light, I only questioned the moon being in the background with this lighting.
Even better, the story's grabbed me, brilliant, wonderful, and fun. Words are great, pics great, you've got a real winner going here.
All seems a bit brown to me....but then again, wood is brown...:confused: |
Post by Heidi // Jul 8, 2006, 5:00pm
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I liked the level of glow you had behind him before better. It looked more like a beam and he stood out more. (I know, I know... picking nits). |
Post by Steinie // Jul 8, 2006, 5:19pm
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The moon and trees look better in the first, also the shed and the glow from within. The two heads are better in the last one and Harold looks good in 2 and 3. I agree making the broken part of the shed visible could be an improvement. Keep it coming! Between Harold, the Beast, the Mech, Glass studies and everyone elses contributions I'm really enjoying (and learning) this summer. |
Post by splinters // Jul 9, 2006, 6:05am
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Cheers Guys, I appreciate your help but there are a few points here;
1. There is no light source in the shed-it is around Harold's neck. I therefore put a bit of mood light in there for mystery/illumination.
2. If you look at the scene where he has just crashed-the moon is just visible through the hole in the shed wall. It would be impossible to see from this front view and even if I fudged it, two adjacent images in the book would have identical backgrounds from competely different viewpoints.
3. Given the 'locals' "get out of here" attitude, I saw them as a bit 'local yokel' (daft) and unlikely to maintain a nice white picket fence while the shed is in such a state.
Might wrap this up and come back to it later.... |
Post by splinters // Jul 9, 2006, 6:48am
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Maybe this will help;
He stumbled to his feet and with a groan threw back the door, to see the local people staring back at him in awe. Then a little voice cried out, trembling with fear; “get back in your spaceship, we don’t want your kind round here!” |
Post by W!ZARD // Jul 9, 2006, 6:56am
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One word: Totally brilliant!!
I am at a total loss as to why you are having such a battle to get your books published - the stories are brilliant, the images are even brillianter! Your stories here are inspirational Splinters - you've compelled me to get more work happening with my own characters.
Thanks for sharing! |
Post by splinters // Jul 9, 2006, 7:11am
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One word: Totally brilliant!!
Actually, that is two but thank you all the same...;)
I appreciate your comments guys and Wizard, I have no idea why no-one wants these.
I am fast losing faith in British publishing so if anyone knows of an agent or publisher on the other side of the pond-I am more than willing to give it a try. After all, there are far more book buying people in America than in Britain...and they seem less 'rigid' in their attitude to children's books....:rolleyes: |
Post by W!ZARD // Jul 9, 2006, 7:40am
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Actually, that is two but thank you all the same...;)
Aha! You spotted my deliberate mistake! I figured the teacher in you wouldn't be able to let that one pass without comment (I've done a spot of teaching myself so I understand the mindset)
I appreciate your comments guys and Wizard, I have no idea why no-one wants these.
I am fast losing faith in British publishing so if anyone knows of an agent or publisher on the other side of the pond-I am more than willing to give it a try. After all, there are far more book buying people in America than in Britain...and they seem less 'rigid' in their attitude to children's books....:rolleyes:
Hmmn - you could try an Australian publishing house - most of the New Zealand ones are subsidiaries of the British ones but Australian tend to have a sense of humour. They might identify with the quintessential 'Britishness' of your work a bit better than our American friends - (you'd have to make the 'Rocket' into a Harley Davidson!!).
I understand the potential for self-publishing is greater in the US too. |
Post by brianalldridge // Jul 9, 2006, 12:00pm
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Actually, that is two but thank you all the same...;)
I appreciate your comments guys and Wizard, I have no idea why no-one wants these.
I am fast losing faith in British publishing so if anyone knows of an agent or publisher on the other side of the pond-I am more than willing to give it a try. After all, there are far more book buying people in America than in Britain...and they seem less 'rigid' in their attitude to children's books....:rolleyes:You'd have to change quite a bit of the spelling though:rolleyes: |
Post by MadMouse // Jul 9, 2006, 12:08pm
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:) :D :banana: :banana: :jumpy: :banana: :banana: :D :)
I think that just about covers it :D |
Post by hemulin // Jul 9, 2006, 1:39pm
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It's looking good! |
Post by splinters // Jul 9, 2006, 2:24pm
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Straight on then....lots of work to do here but you have seen it all before; start rough...end up OK...:D
Excuse dodgy trees too...:confused:
Heading to the country he went racing everywhere, riding on his new red bike he didn’t have a care. He drove around all day until the sun began to set and then he headed home before it rained and he got wet! |
Post by splinters // Jul 9, 2006, 11:40pm
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Well, for better or worse, here is the final render (smaller than original of course). Enjoy...:) |
Post by splinters // Jul 10, 2006, 12:18am
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Ok, lets start giving you the pages. However, I have a dilemma; this is the first page of the previous book-'Harold's Hair' but the text is the same for each book-a bit like the intro speech to most tv programs (Star Trek etc.).
Now do I use the same image or do something different? I had a rough of Harold stood on the platform of the Train Station, but it hardly sums up the rest of the text.
Whaddya think?-This is Page 1 by the way...cover to follow...:) |
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